Okay sir, just going to point out everything wrong with this fanfic
I'm calling it a fanfic because frankly calling it a comic would be an insult to comics
#1 The grammar
Don't you mean whole and tried?
#2 The story
So why are there zombies? Where are they? How can Twilight work at the park her whole life when there's zombies everywhere? Where are the other characters? Will you ever continue this?
#3 The characters
Mordecai doesn't have any personality outside of being some blank slate for Quintel to insert himself in so there's nothing I can say about him but Twilight is just bland in this.
Overall, I give your fanfic an F sir
as a fanfiction critique I can respect that
just please don't think I'm attacking you personally because as a critique I am obligated to never attack an individual but whether his or her work