The story goes Twilight was trying out a new magic trick, and she ended up in Regular Show. But Twilight feels alone and soon she falls in love with Mordecai. ~ I'm not so good with stories.
That's what I made this about.
I feel so stupid...I didn't realize I spelled SO MANY WORDS WRONG! My next comic, I'm checking to make sure everything is spelled right.
The spelled right version:
Where exactly am I? I'm sure not in Ponyville... Or with my friends...I probably will never see them again, I'll probably be trapped here my hole LIFE! I'll work here at the park my hole life. I've tried magic to return, but this world won't except it. I hope one day, just one day, I return. But for now.. My life will never be the same again..
The good news is that this took 2 weeks to do, maybe 3...I am still happy I got this finished beforel Monday.....
P.S. Follow me on Tumblr, I'll post the sketch of my art before it's done! missythelioness.tumblr.com/
great job on the comic though
Okay sir, just going to point out everything wrong with this fanfic
I'm calling it a fanfic because frankly calling it a comic would be an insult to comics
#1 The grammar
Don't you mean whole and tried?
#2 The story
So why are there zombies? Where are they? How can Twilight work at the park her whole life when there's zombies everywhere? Where are the other characters? Will you ever continue this?
#3 The characters
Mordecai doesn't have any personality outside of being some blank slate for Quintel to insert himself in so there's nothing I can say about him but Twilight is just bland in this.
Overall, I give your fanfic an F sir
as a fanfiction critique I can respect that
just please don't think I'm attacking you personally because as a critique I am obligated to never attack an individual but whether his or her work
my my my my my Regular Show!
i wonder why i trap in here
my regular show
until mordecai come suprised me
Work in the park
go slack off
and then slack again
we run away
and the we going slack off again
My regular Show
WTF That im doing herrreeeeeeee!!!!!!
Interesting idea, though. o:
what will happen next??
good job, bro
there's no point in Mordecai being in there
you could have replaced him with anyone and it would be the same
Im very impressed.